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作者:香陵居士 (等级:16 - 好恐怖呀,发帖:22662) 发表:2008-09-05 00:16:18  楼主  关注此帖
我抛砖引玉一下,哎,2秘是要支持的,虽然最近1秘不见了。。。Dear Sir or Madam, This is Daincy from Nanyang Academy Fine Arts Institute (NAFA). I read your advertisement for sales designer in The Times on August 30th. I would like to apply for this position. I believe it is not only a job I am competent enough to fit and contribute to the company, but also a career opportunity that I would like to try as my very first step entering the industry. I graduated from NAFA this year with major in Fashion Merchandising and marketing. Please find attached my CV for more information about my expertise and related experience. Thank you very much, and look forward to hearing from you soon. Wish you a pleasant day ahead! Daincy, He Ying
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作者:香陵居士 (等级:16 - 好恐怖呀,发帖:22662) 发表:2008-09-05 00:28:55  2楼
请帮忙看下我的CV, 这样写可以吗??Dear Sir or Madam: Your advertisement for sales designer in august 30 THE TIME interested me because the position that you described sounds exactly like the kind of job I am seeking. I am fresh grad from NAFA; the course is Fashion Merchandising & marketing, basically I can do the designs are able to fit the marketing needs. And more information will in my resume. I will appreciate the privilege of an interview. And if you need call me: 90782913 Thank you for your time and consideration. Have a nice day Daincy, He Ying
首先,这叫Cover letter,不叫CV
其次,cover letter和CV最忌讳出现拼写或者语法错误。楼主的拼写没有大问题,可是语法实在让人不敢恭维。希望楼主多注意冠词,连词和介词的运用。
再次,楼主可以注意一下英文信件的基本格式。虽然相对于书面信函来说电子邮件比较随意,可是一般正式的电子邮件,基本的呼语,敬语,等也需要应用准确。
最后,楼主应该注意一下措辞和语气。可以假设一下自己是人力资源的人,思考一下看到这封信会对作者产生什么样的看法。

当然这些只是基本要求,更高的技巧还有很多,诸如用词,结构,语气,分段都可以很艺术化地处理,这些需要楼主随着英文水平的提高而逐步领悟,就不是我们能帮得上楼主的了。但楼主只要多看,多想,多写,相信写出好的cover letter应该也并不难。
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