四月份考GRE作文,哪位达人给我点建议
但我写作挺烂的,正在练,这是我这两天写的一个题目,
请各位神仙看后指点指点
ISSUE TASK:
An individual's greatness cannot be judged objectively by his or her contermporaties; the most objective evaluators of a person's greatness are people who belong to a later time.
MY RESPONSE:
The arguer asserts that the most objective evaluators of a person's greatness are people who belong to a later time rather than his or her contemporaries. This statement, while appealing to some people and in some respects, cannot stand further scrutiny. In fact, though admitting that people who live after a individual sometimes serve as evaluators of his or her greatness, I believe it is his or her contemporaries that should be viewed as the most objective ones.
For one thing, coexistent people possess the opportunity to experience in themselves updatedly what the individual have brought and realize the implications of his or her greatness, which facilitates the evaluation. When our great men opens (more...)
my 2 cents worth...z
单复数的语法很混乱,这个慢慢理一理吧。
例子举得不错,但正方的例子全是和美国社会相关的运动型人物(包括汤姆叔叔的小屋,因为它是因为其政策理念的意义而被欣赏),反方一个例子变成梵高的艺术。这是两种不同的greatness,不能拿来这么比。在这个意义上,你的文章犯了一个定题不清的毛病,就是greatness是一个什么范围内的概念。如果你把反方的例子也举成社会型的(比如,金赛的性学报告),那么对比起来会自然得多。
例子举得不错,但正方的例子全是和美国社会相关的运动型人物(包括汤姆叔叔的小屋,因为它是因为其政策理念的意义而被欣赏),反方一个例子变成梵高的艺术。这是两种不同的greatness,不能拿来这么比。在这个意义上,你的文章犯了一个定题不清的毛病,就是greatness是一个什么范围内的概念。如果你把反方的例子也举成社会型的(比如,金赛的性学报告),那么对比起来会自然得多。
-------------- F. Bacon, 'Of Beauty'