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Dear Sir or Madam:

This is Daincy He Ying. I would like to apply for the position of sales engineer you advertised on THE TIME dated 30 August 2008.

I am a fresh graduate from Nanyang Academy of Fine Arts (“NAFA”), majored in Fashion Merchandising & Marketing. I am competent in designing products that suit marketing needs. [More information, such as your final year project or practical design, to illustrate the competency.]

I have had several internship experiences in the relevant industry during my course in NAFA. [more information on the internships, if any]

I would appreciate if I may be granted an interview opportunity. Please do not hesitate to contact me at [phone and email address].

Thank you and warm regards,

Daincy, He Ying

6 Sep 2008
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